Help!! anyone can correct the paragraphes for me? Hurry ?
I am a student in Taiwan. I will go to an English test tomorrow, but my teacher is too busy to correct the final four paragraphs for me! Can anyone help to correct the four paragraphs (150-180 words per paragraph), I am nervousous about this exam, please help me!! Thanks you !!
(1) invitationation Dear Dr. Mori:
Recently, I had read your research about the disease of cat in Journal of Cat and this research is really an excellent research. I sincerely invite you to attend The 1st International Cat Symposium and give a speech about the disease of cat in this symposium.
The 1st International Cat Symposium will be held in the Gis convention of National Taiwan University, Taipei, Taiwan from April 8, 2009 to April 9, 2009.We will invite international scientists to give keynote addresses during The 1st International Cat Symposium. The vision of this symposium is “The diseases, culture and species of cat” and the objects include management of the culture of cat, disease prevention of cat and species of cat. The schedule of symposium has been added to this mail.
During the period of symposium, I will reserve the Leader Hotel for you. Leader Hotel is next to the Gis convention. It takes just 5 minutes for you to walk to conference hall. The Metropolitan Rapid Transportation (MRT) is an inexpensive, fast and convenient transportation tool and you could look round Taipei at night.
After the symposium, I will make an arrangement about the post-symposium tour including the 6 flagship sites for you to visit the beautiful Taiwan. The 6 flagship sites list below: (1) Taipei 101- It is the tallest building in the world. There are many top brands and fine restaurants in Taipei 101 building. (2) Yangmingshan – This is a national park at Taipei area and you can indulge yourself in a hot mineral bath here. (3) Sun Moon Lake National Scenic Area - The Sun Moon Lake, located in the middle of Taiwan, is the only natural big lake in Taiwan. The Shao Clan is the earliest clan that lived in the Sun Moon Lake region. The Harvest Festival, Sowing Festival and their special handicraft fair are held every year. You could enjoy the special aborigine culture here. (4) Alishan- Alishan, located in the middle of Taiwan, has the special Forest Railroad. You can take the train to enjoy a forest bathing here. (5) Lover river – Love river lies across Kaohsiung. Everyday from 4:00-11:00, visitors can take the boats on the east or west coast to look at the romantic sights of Love River. (6) Kenting National Park – It located in the south of Taiwan, is the only tropic national park in Taiwan. You can do the sea sport such as surfing or visit the National of Marine Biology and Aquarium. (7) Taroko National Park –Taroko National Park is famous for its spectacular mountains. The waterfalls are the other famous scenic spots here. I believe it will be a wonderful tour. During the period in Taiwan, you can pay by credit card or you can exchange the cash of New Taiwan Dollars in Taiwan Bank. (New Taiwan Dollars have been translated into U.S. Dollars at the December 12,2008 exchange rate of NT$32.44 per U.S. Dollars.)
If you agree to attend this symposium, you should fill the registration form below and provide the speech abstract to me before December 31, 2008. I am proud to invite you to the 1st International Cat symposium.
Your friend
Chang Chih-Jie
December 12, 2008
(2) energy crisis
One of the main problems of the world today is the energy crisis. Currently, as the industry and agriculture develop so fast, the consumption of energy such as oil, gases or coals is dramatically increasing. On one hand, energy is important for the economic development. On the other hand, limited and unrecoverable energy such as oil, can not offer us sufficiently. No matter how long could the oil use, we must face the crisis of energy now. We must face it and try to solve it.
With the usage of energy, global warming is a serious side effect. Cars, motorcycles and industry machines use oil and coals as the power. At the mean time, they discharge the CO2. When CO2 emission to air, the CO2 will cover over the earth. Because of this, the thermal energy from the sun can not difference and will increase the earth temperature. The disadvantage of global warming include storms, droughts, the dissolve of glacier and the changes of weather in the world.
To slow down the usage of energy and decrease the effect of global warming, we should save the energy and decrease the emission of CO2. In aspect of save the energy and decrease the emission of CO2, we can do some changes as fellow in our life. We should use the energy saving electrical equipments such as energy saving bulb and we should turn off the light when we leave the room. We should open the windows instead of the usage of Air Conditioning. The ways above could help us to save energy. Everyday we could ride a bicycle or take a bus to the office or school and if the distance is not too long, we can ta
I see it's too late to answer this for you, as you will have already had your test. In the future, you might want to divide something this extensive into several, smaller questions. That way, you're more likely to get answers right away.
Just to give you an idea, I've corrected your first paragraph; corrections are in capitals, unnecessary words deleted (" X ".)
1) INVITATION
Dear Dr. Mori:
Recently, I X read your research about X diseaseS of catS in THE Journal of CatS, and this research is really X excellent X. I sincerely invite you to attend the 1st International Cat Symposium and PRESENT a speech about the diseaseS of catS in this symposium.
I see it's too late to answer this for you, as you will have already had your test. In the future, you might want to divide something this extensive into several, smaller questions. That way, you're more likely to get answers right away.
Just to give you an idea, I've corrected your first paragraph; corrections are in capitals, unnecessary words deleted (" X ".)
1) INVITATION
Dear Dr. Mori:
Recently, I X read your research about X diseaseS of catS in THE Journal of CatS, and this research is really X excellent X. I sincerely invite you to attend the 1st International Cat Symposium and PRESENT a speech about the diseaseS of catS in this symposium.
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